Beginning of Darkness

[Jou-chan]

Yep I started to write poetry..... again. *sigh* i must say this one isn't very good, but its an improvement


Night has come
ingulfing us all into darkness
There is no more light
To save us from hell
For the blackness of night
Has stolen the light from the sun
Locking it away
Invisible to everyone
There is no more warmth
So our hearts shall freeze
The dark is using the captured light
for its own evil deeds
Darkness causes the mind to numb
unable to remember the right from the wrong
The two begin to combine
Causing confusion and hatred from the heart to the mind
The world is in shambles
For there is no light to bring peace
Brothers killing brothers
As lovers cry for their lost dreams
This feeds the Darkness
As the number of coffins build
Night is no longer a place to sleep
It is now a time of Darkness greed.


What did ya think?

[Kawaii Shuichi]

I really really like it! Just like all your other work. You're very talented my dear. Can't wait to read more...
Can I add this poem to my scrap book as I do with all the other poems I get permission from the writer that I like...?

[Jou-chan]

Sure...I still dont think this poem is my best work but whatever. Its suppose to be part one of a two part poem but i haven't finished part two and i dont know if i will so...

[ReiRei]

Jou-chan this is a really good poem, don't knock your talent girl...you are very good and it's excellent

[bloodlover]

nice pome

[Blades Of Nightmare]

cool