Starlight Lullaby

[Seraphim]

Yes, I do realize that I have posted this before, but it was erased a long while ago. I'd like some feedback on it. Thank you.




Starlight Lullaby

Let me sing a song for you
I need you tonight
But you're gone

I'll be all right in the end
Yes, I will
I made this promise to myself

Crossing my heart with a
Trembling fingertip
But promises are meant to be

Broken, aren't they?
Rain pours down in the form of
Silver-lined tears

I am shivering as my heart
Breaks once more
My world is icing over

Without your smile like the sun
Silence and snow flood
My world with endless grieving

The silver has frozen
I will never admit
That I need you

As much as the Stars need the Sky
It hurts whenever
I think of you

Your ghost lies in my arms
Asking sweetly for a lullaby
Butterfly flutterby

Lullaby and good night
Softly, I tell the empty room that
I need you

Let me sing a song for you

[ReiRei]

wow, seraphim this is good. Very heartfelt and very well thought out. Keep it up

[Kawaii Shuichi]

:shock:

I love it. It is so beautiful! *tear*
I can't wait to read more from you.