Blue Sky

[Dark Shadow]

I see the blue sky
in those empty eyes
that I love to see,
those distant empty eyes,
that I wish to be near to,
just to share a sip of
happiness I could offer,
I keep staring at those distant,
lonely eyes,
only to realize that I am staring,
at the distant blue sky...


*I changed it, this expresses better how I see it now...*

[Dark Shadow]

I'd like some feedback... as I still believe this was my best poem ever... so... sorry for reviving it...

[The Guiltiest Gear]

i like it,has a bit of a sad atmosphere about it

[frank]

This is good writing, Dyne.

I like the way the reader gets lost in the eyes which become the sky. Very well written to make it interesting and keep the focal point.

the imagery is good, and the emotional texture support each other.

Kudos! ^^

[Erk Mizuhara]

Excellently portrayed, Dyne. I often feel the same way about the sky (not exactly, but pretty much), so this poem really hit the spot for me.